Paragraph Analysis 2

For this post, I will be analyzing one of my paragraphs that can be found within my draft for project 2. Similar to like we did for project 1, I will be breaking down the many components of a paragraph and deciding if what can be found within my own paragraph is effective or not.

 mathec. "Magnifying Glass" 11/20/12 via Public Domain Files. Public Domain Mark 1.0

You can find the copy of my paragraph, along with my comments on it, here.

During my analysis, I learned that there is much more development needed within my paragraphs, which is a key component for this kind of writing. I could also focus more in keeping my main ideas clear instead of being so vague. However, I feel that I effectively organized my paragraphs and included clear, smooth transitions. The linking of ideas was good at some points and worse in others, but I feel that once I add more to each paragraph, I will be able to link them well.